Sydrone
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Post by Sydrone on Mar 16, 2015 17:25:30 GMT
who said that I have to listen to you! Not a good thing to say to an Admin unless you want to be banned m8
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Mar 18, 2015 21:20:22 GMT
hey i thought black sun was someone else not Astrinal
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Sydrone
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Post by Sydrone on Mar 18, 2015 22:16:51 GMT
If you look in her sig, Black Sun is one of her OCs. Be more observant Thunderwave. Also there has been no editing since either me, Vampyricon, Ast/Blacky or Shadow have suggested the changes you should make, If you want to RP, you should make some changes.
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Mar 18, 2015 22:29:38 GMT
i made some changes if u can notice
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Sydrone
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Post by Sydrone on Mar 18, 2015 22:34:32 GMT
Not many. Dark Matter still hasn't been edited out for one. "You can't stop Thunderwave because he's too strong" hmmm... Not sure what I think of that. "His courage helps him through any battle" HIS COURAGE IS 5!
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Vampyricon
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Post by Vampyricon on Mar 18, 2015 22:52:27 GMT
I noticed the changes but you have to make the tech specs and bios agree with one another, change the description so it doesn't make Thunderwave OP, and don't mention canon characters like Optimus and Megatron.
Remember, the character is not interesting only because of their strengths, but also because of their weaknesses.
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Mar 18, 2015 23:37:30 GMT
how come other people mention canon characters in their apps? btw dark matter isn't there but only in the nulecon shockcannon.
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Post by CallMeAst♥ on Mar 18, 2015 23:57:13 GMT
how come other people mention canon characters in their apps? btw dark matter isn't there but only in the nulecon shockcannon. Unlike your application, they don't intertwined there character with the canon. Some only mention minor characters.
And please remove the mention of Dark Matter, and change the Nucleon Shockcannon to something else.
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Mar 19, 2015 19:24:34 GMT
ok
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Sydrone
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Post by Sydrone on Mar 19, 2015 22:50:01 GMT
Listen, Thunderwave. You may think you've changed some stuff nut I can't see anything. It still says "Dark Matter Battle Axe" amongst other Dark Matter related objects (Including a grossly overpowered Nucleon Shock Cannon), now Astrinal, Gearcharge, Shadowstrike, Vampyricon and myself have all given valid pieces of the app to edit out, now if you even want to RP Drift, you need to listen to these pieces of advice.
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Apr 1, 2015 23:25:42 GMT
ok
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Black Sun
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Post by Black Sun on Apr 5, 2015 1:00:34 GMT
Okay, you've still got some problems.
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For the armor, 100 bullets? If you were going against someone with a super sonic repeater, you'd be dead in seconds. If I were you, I'd take that out and add something else.
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This is considered god mode amongst these forums. Take this out and add someone more toned down.
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Rewrite and evaluate. This is beyond OP and against the rules.
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This isn't a sample post.. It's almost like your- fastforwarding. You need to rewrite this. If you need any examples, check some of the threads around the forums.
I'll give you more examples when your done.
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Apr 5, 2015 1:07:02 GMT
thank you
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Sydrone
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Post by Sydrone on Jul 31, 2015 16:27:36 GMT
1.) Sample RP is probably too short. 2.) SO MANY FRAGGING TYPOS! Seriously, dude, learn to spell.
3.) "Armour is strong to protect from 75 bullets" You do know how many guns can shoot more than that in a short space of time, right?
4.) Security Camera is not a proper gadget and what are you going to need a bomb detonator for? Grenades go off on their own.
5.) "Cloaking is invisiblity"... No S**t Sherlock
6.) Um... why does a fuel cell make you transform? I mean, I know Thunder is a carbon copy of a WFC Destroyer but COME ON! Originality is a thing, you know
7.) Thermo Axe and Sword are mentioned twice
8.) "His courage helps him through any battle" False. His courage is only 6
9.) A Melee weapon description is supposed to say the effects of a weapon, not what it looks like. I think anyone would know that a Cybertronian weapon has Cybertronian symbols on it.
10.) "He doesn't like Vehicons because their always dumb" *points at Taggon*
11.) "His strength can let him pick up houses for cover" Oh, so we have an already OP WFC Rip-off picking up 35 story apartment buildings now, yay!
12.) "Thunderwave is a get-to-know type of Con, always looking for some friends" False. Charisma is a 6.
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Black Sun
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Post by Black Sun on Aug 24, 2015 11:31:49 GMT
Sydrone
Could you please refrain from Back Seat moderating? Let the staff do there jobs.
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Post by Ulti on Aug 24, 2015 11:48:09 GMT
1.) Sample RP is probably too short. 2.) SO MANY FRAGGING TYPOS! Seriously, dude, learn to spell.
3.) "Armour is strong to protect from 75 bullets" You do know how many guns can shoot more than that in a short space of time, right?
4.) Security Camera is not a proper gadget and what are you going to need a bomb detonator for? Grenades go off on their own.
5.) "Cloaking is invisiblity"... No S**t Sherlock
6.) Um... why does a fuel cell make you transform? I mean, I know Thunder is a carbon copy of a WFC Destroyer but COME ON! Originality is a thing, you know
7.) Thermo Axe and Sword are mentioned twice
8.) "His courage helps him through any battle" False. His courage is only 6
9.) A Melee weapon description is supposed to say the effects of a weapon, not what it looks like. I think anyone would know that a Cybertronian weapon has Cybertronian symbols on it.
10.) "He doesn't like Vehicons because their always dumb" *points at Taggon*
11.) "His strength can let him pick up houses for cover" Oh, so we have an already OP WFC Rip-off picking up 35 story apartment buildings now, yay!
12.) "Thunderwave is a get-to-know type of Con, always looking for some friends" False. Charisma is a 6.
*cough* Says the guy who's OCs are all Assassin's creed rip-offs...
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Sydrone
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Post by Sydrone on Aug 24, 2015 13:17:47 GMT
Oy, my characters aren't "rip offs" they have hidden blades and hoods and some groups. That's it. The ceremonial way they treat the dead and the way they live is all on me. What does Thunderwave have, hm?
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Post by CallMeAst♥ on Aug 24, 2015 15:49:40 GMT
Stop. Both of you. Could you both please take this argument elsewhere?
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Sept 11, 2015 20:41:49 GMT
hey I may not be that perfect ok I'm a human just like you but different
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Sept 11, 2015 20:42:09 GMT
and plus it's still W.I.P.
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