Vampyricon
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Post by Vampyricon on Mar 1, 2015 4:15:34 GMT
My personal thoughts on this would be: 1. The armour description is too short. Also, "transformium" (btw, I hate Michael Bay for calling it that) is basically what all Cybertronians have on their chassis. 2. Your Nucleon Shockcannon (1) shouldn't be able to one-shot Autobots, (2) shouldn't be called a Nucleon (i.e. protons and neutrons/that one fuel source) Shockcannon if it fires dark matter, and (3) if you're gonna be scientifically accurate, dark matter is just unknown (by human standards) matter. 3. Bold and brave would be more of a Courage: 8. 4. "You can't stop Thunderwave, because he's too strong." (1) Godmodding. (2) Strength isn't everything. There's also intelligence, speed, accuracy, dexterity, firepower, endurance, and melee skills. 5. "Thunderwave doesn't like Vehicons because they're always dumb." That's racist. *ding* Also, look at Taggon. 6. "Megatron came up to Thunderwave and convinced him to join the Decepticons." (1) Megatron has enough Decepticons joining on their own. He doesn't need to convince people one-on-one. (2) Don't mention canon characters, e.g. Megatron. 7. "The core of the dying planet was mad at Thunderwave and corrupted Thunderwave with dark matter, but Thunderwave had dark matter in him and gave Thunderwave more power that is enough to destroy one third of the Autobot army." (1) Primus is ensuring his own survival, he won't have enough strength to care about a tiny little Cybertronian. (2) Pretty sure your "dark matter" is actually dark energon by now, which is banned. (3) One third? One bot with intelligence 7, dexterity 5, speed 3, accuracy 4, and melee 5 can destroy one third of the Autobot army? I wonder what my OCs can do, then. 8. "Dark matter helps Thunderwave deal a lot of damage." Again, dark matter is just matter, and dark energon is banned. 9. "His tough armor helps him stay protected from 100 bullets." Pretty sure a subsonic repeater, or any variations, can take him out in a few seconds then, which means his endurance is more like 2 than 10. 10. "His Sonic painwave deals enough damage to destroy one third one the Autobot army and half of the human army." No. Just... No. 11. "His armor may help him from damage, but it doesn't last long." Again, endurance 2 instead of 10. Just my opinions.
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Post by CallMeAst♥ on Mar 3, 2015 0:24:33 GMT
((*Hugs Vamp* God, I want you to be my assistant XD ))
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Mar 5, 2015 0:37:54 GMT
try it now
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Vampyricon
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Post by Vampyricon on Mar 8, 2015 9:52:48 GMT
[Voided for immaturity. Sorry Thunder. ]
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Shadowstrike
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Post by Shadowstrike on Mar 8, 2015 11:56:18 GMT
If you say so. 1. Nothing's been changed 2. You need a sample RP, preferably not about your dog's excretion. 3. Your grammar's killing me. 4. Your nonexistent sonic painwave wiped out one third of the Autobot army and half of the human army. 5. "His emotions can affect him if they get hurt." I could put that as a strength and it would still work. 6. You only have 4 weaknesses when 5 is needed. 7. "He may sacrifice himself to save his dog and his lord and master, i.e. Megatron." (1) Megatron's MIA (2) Sacrificing himself to save his dog? I understand some have very strong emotional attachments to their pets, but this makes me doubt if his intelligence is really 7. 8. "His cloaking helps him hide from enemy fire." Technically it doesn't. It only prevents him from being specially chosen for a headshot or something similar. 9. "Has unpierceable armor unless you attack the fuel cell to make it transform." (1) Interesting. Who builds a fuel cell in a shootable place on a tank unless they want it to explode? (2) Fuel cell not exploding when shot. (3) Is his fuel cell also his neural cluster? Otherwise why would he involuntarily transform when hit? Now for the nitpicky stuff: 10. Kaon isn't a planet. It's a city state/meson/DJD member. 11. Age of 14 million? 14 million Earth years or Cybertron years? Or Raxacoricofallapatorian years? Or the Cybertronian equivalent of a 14 million-year-old human? 6: Only FOUR weaknesses and FOUR strengths need to be bulletpointed either that OR FIVE sentences for strengths and FIVE for weaknesses equally. 7: (2) Loyalty does not depict intelligence. 8: A cloak effectively conceals a user by warping light around the user making them little more than a hazy silhouette, in a battlefield scenario that would hide a user from enemy sight not just make a headshot harder. 11: 14 million would be earth years if your unaware a "year" means the exact same thing for both humans and cybertronians. Vampyricon although I appreciate you sometimes make valid points you need to stop backseat moderating.
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Mar 9, 2015 21:53:03 GMT
Vampuricon Have u ever played WFC? or any of the transformer cybertron games?
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Black Sun
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Decepticon SiC
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Post by Black Sun on Mar 9, 2015 22:03:40 GMT
Dark matter is the same thing as dark energon, which is banned.
The cloak ability has been banned by the website.
Nucleon Shockcannon? On-Shot's Autobots? Uh- no. Choose a different choice of weapon.
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Mar 9, 2015 22:08:38 GMT
Dark Matter is different than Dark Energon and CLoaking ability is not banned as well and Nuclon Shockcannon can kil autotroppers with one shot
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Detective Ulti
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Post by Detective Ulti on Mar 9, 2015 22:10:01 GMT
While Autotroopers are generics, one shotting them without the RP'er of the Autotroopers is still godmod. What strengths does Dark Matter give him?
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Sydrone
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Sky's little helper.
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Post by Sydrone on Mar 9, 2015 22:10:38 GMT
Alright, I'm going to say what I think of this. 1. No sample RP -Nitpicks- 2. 5X? Is that even allowed? 3. Kaon would go under the city state category 4. I know we all have a general sense of cloaking but maybe you could specify what it actually is, instead of referring us to a game which we may or may not have played 5. Again with the face -Maybe important- 6. Just saying that the armour is Transformium isn't really describing the armour, say what it's built for, hardness, agility etc. -Big issue- 7. A NUCLEON SHOCK CANNON KILLS AUTOBOTS WITH ONE SHOT?! OH HELL NAW! Seriously though, that's overpowered and may need to fixed. -Nitpick- 8. I believe Megsy is dead... -Maybe an issue- 9. SONIC PAIN WAVE KILLS 1/3 OF THE AUTOBOT ARMY?! Bruticus' Pain wave can't even do that and last time I checked, he's bigger than a destroyer class Decepticon. 10. Dark Matter = Dark Energon to me (which is banned)
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Mar 9, 2015 22:15:55 GMT
Sonic Pain wave isn't on here
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Sydrone
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Sky's little helper.
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Post by Sydrone on Mar 9, 2015 22:19:31 GMT
Strengths : MINIMUM of four bullets ( Full sentences required ). You may also write a paragraph consisting of five sentences revolving around 'strength'. - Dark matter helps Thunderwave to deal alot of damage. - His tough armor helps him stay protected from fireblast for 100 bullets. - His Cloaking helps him hide from enemy fire. -His Sonic painwave deals enough damage to destroy one third one the Autobot army and half of the human army.
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Shadowstrike
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Post by Shadowstrike on Mar 9, 2015 22:26:13 GMT
Dark matter is the same thing as dark energon, which is banned. The cloak ability has been banned by the website. Nucleon Shockcannon? On-Shot's Autobots? Uh- no. Choose a different choice of weapon. I see no mention where cloak has been banned.
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Mar 9, 2015 22:27:29 GMT
Sydrone did you click on the first one or the second and comented
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Raiza
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Post by Raiza on Mar 9, 2015 23:28:57 GMT
Looks fine by me. If he is hanging with Raiza, he would be a bit tall for her.
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Black Sun
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Post by Black Sun on Mar 9, 2015 23:58:17 GMT
Dark Matter is different than Dark Energon and CLoaking ability is not banned as well and Nuclon Shockcannon can kil autotroppers with one shot Shadowstrike: When I was makin' Storm, I was told it was banned. @thunderwave: I don't think you get what I'm saying. I'm gonna' give you a small tip, okay? It should be very easy to understand. Me, boss. You, no boss.When I say there's a flaw in your profile, and you refuse to fix it, that shows both disrespect and no will to work with people. I'm not blowing up at you, and I'm trying to act like jerk. Look, it's simple, do as I say, and you'll eventually be approved. And trust me brah, you've got LOTS of things you need to fix. I'm only getting started. No run along now, get it done.
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Thunderwave
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Post by Thunderwave on Mar 15, 2015 21:56:34 GMT
who said that I have to listen to you!
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Myla
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Post by Myla on Mar 15, 2015 22:18:41 GMT
The mods of this site. If you don't listen to her you might be banned, so I suggest you listen.
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Post by Skyspray (Aquahaze) on Mar 16, 2015 5:22:36 GMT
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Post by CallMeAst♥ on Mar 16, 2015 13:46:18 GMT
who said that I have to listen to you!
Because I'm an administrator. Now, are you going to argue about my account counterparts, or fix your application? Seriously, this argument is useless, and I should deny your application now. But I'm giving you a chance, because I have mercy. ow, please, fix your application.
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